Friday, February 15, 2008

Fred

Egypt, a grand country of fun in the sun. Quickly, the plane that was to carry me to this place made its take off. After I landed, we had to wait in the airport for five hours. This was because the plane had landed at 3am, which was too late to allow us to be free. I would have compared it to being in a prison, had I not been asleep for most of the time. Finally at 6:00am we got a taxi to our destination, the Movenpick hotel. On the large van ride, we saw armed soldiers lining the streets. Because of this, I was very uncomfortable at first. When we arrived at the hotel, I saw a fantastic sight. Within the walls was a tropical paradise. The pool was great, with a floating bar to order drinks from. The water at the beach was so blue, almost teal or cyan. The Egyptian cuisine was phenomenal. We had a great time, loving every minute. A windsurfing lesson, and light nights. Our hotel room was a great room on the beach. We could see the bright water. One day we went on and ATV ride in the desert. All in all, my trip to Egypt was a success

13 comments:

Liz said...

You went to there?? That sound really cool. Good Job!
:)
Laurel

Liz said...

There wern't any mummies! Not even a pyrimid! :{ Cole L

Liz said...

You went to Egypt?
That is soo awesome
Im jealous
Great Paragraph


~Lucy =)

Liz said...

thats like awesome. floating bar plus paradise.......sounds cool!

divya =)

Liz said...

wow. a paradise? floating bar. sounds relaxing!
~soumya

Liz said...

That is soooo coool that u went to Egypt! I used to want to go there sooo bad. Pyramids r so cool.
GabbyL**

Liz said...

cool sotry, hope u had fun

-kevin

Liz said...

Good sentence structure and grammar it's funny.

-Ryan

Liz said...

SWEET Egypt sounds awesome i wana go there

-Jared (Freds Friendly Friend)

Liz said...

WOW Egypt sounds beautiful! Your story was great and very detailed. Good Job!

~Meghan~

Liz said...

Fred,

Overall, good job. Egypt, what a great experience.

When writing watch your use of commas. In the bottom half of the paragraph you tended to use them randomly. Have a look.

Mrs. Kayzar

Liz said...

Fredo?

-Kevin

Liz said...

Wow....

-Kevin