Wednesday, February 20, 2008
Billy
About two years ago my family and I went to Hawaii. I was really excited but the plane ride was 18 hours long. I thought I was going to die. And a few days before the planes just decided to stop serving food so we had to bring our own. I was really tired but I only slept for an hour. When we got there I was really glad. When we got off the plane we were given leis and it was really cool. During our trip we rode on an outrigger and went snuba diving. I can’t wait to go back.
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5 comments:
Plain rides can be really boring, but it sounds like it was worth the wait. I don't know if snuba a word but I would check your spelling before printing or posting.
Billu,
I would plan your writing a bit more. You jump around on topics. Plus, think about punctuation such as commas when writing.
Mrs. Kayzar
Billy, DON'T FORGET YOUR COMMAS!
Andrew W
BILLAIPH!
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