Friday, February 15, 2008

Elizabeth

To Tennessee
By: Elizabeth Schmeling
My family and I were on our usual trip to Tennessee by car. We were in the car, almost 4 hours into the 11-12 hour car ride. For the last couple hours, I had been listening to music. Since our entire family was in the car, David was being really annoying, and he was bothering everyone. I found that it works best to simply ignore him by reading, even if you have to read the same sentence over 5 times because he’s so loud. Finally, we arrive at my grandparent’s house. Because we had been sitting for 11-12 hours, everyone’s legs were sore. Quickly, we put our bags away in the rooms we would be sleeping in. Then we talked with Grandma and Grandpa for almost half an hour about everything that had happened to us in the last 5 months since we had seen them last. The next day, it was off to Dollywood. That’s right; we were in the car again for another 2 hours. Once we arrived, we walked around the park, and we looked in shops. Finally, it was time for my favorite part, the roller coasters. My grandpa, David, and me went on the Mystery Mine, our favorite roller coaster, 3 times in a row. Lucky for us, we got the front row every time. After we had stayed at my grandparent's house a few more days, it was time to leave again. It was time for the long trip home.

13 comments:

Liz said...

Hey! I love your story! It's very descritive and very good sentance varity! Keep up the good work. LOL!
~Laurel

Liz said...
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Liz said...

your story is really good! it would stink to have to sit in a car for 11-12 hours!!! my favorite part would be the rollarcoaster too!
Marissa

Liz said...

Lot's of waiting and sitting in a car! Love the story. I hope one day I can go to Dollywood it sounds like a lot of fun!

~Kayla

Liz said...

i love roller coasters!! seems like a lot of fun. i sure would hate sitting with my sibling in a car 4 11-12 hrs!!!
divya

Liz said...

I love Dollywood

*Maddie

Liz said...

Your story is so good! I couldn't stand being in the car with Ali when we drove down to Flordia for 18 hours, I don't know how you could stand it either !!! I also don't know how you could go in the front seat of a rollar coaster!!!

*Mackenzie

Liz said...

Man... 3X!! I would have threw up by the 2nd Time! (lollollollol)

Liz said...

AMAZING STORY! jeez yourn a really good writer elizabeth!
~maggie~~
p.s AWESOME STORY!

Liz said...

-Elizabeth
I know what you are talking about, I have to sit in the car for 10 hours and with 2 that was 2 yonger brothers.
-Angela

Liz said...

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Liz said...

Elizabeth,

Did you like the trip? Try writing show vs. tell. Make the reader feel your pain while drivng in the car or the excitement at Dollywood.

Mrs. Kayzar

Liz said...

That sounds like a lot of fun! I really liked your story and how you told it. I wish I could go to Dollywood one day because it sounds really fun. I know what it feels like to be in a car with a sibling. My sister always bugs me in the car! One thing I would suggest is to explain how you felt about stuff. Again great story!

~Kayla :D